The Revision Of The Wedding - 1010 Words

For the revision of The Wedding, I used the rubic and the instructor’s critiques. I changed the opening into an attention getter suggested by the instructor. I also chose the perspective of the main character to add more depth to the poem. I took the dramatic tension and gave more life to that so I could tie it into the character’s perspective. I changed the ending to make it more effective for this poem using the thirteen ways of looking at revision. For the revision of The Bra, I used the suggestions of my peers. Several suggestions came up about the title so I changed it to Support from My Bra. I had a misspelled word that I had to change (stares). The metal piece in the bra was removed, because it confused the readers†¦show more content†¦I looked at examples of other writers and the different styles of poetry. I changed the rhythm of this poem to make it flow easier. I used the guidelines from thirteen ways of looking at revisions. Now the poem has a solid , rhythmic pattern. For the revision of Dear Father, I used the instructor’s critiques. I added more lines to the poem to make my voice more expressive and relatable to my life. I removed a few lines so the poem could have a specific tone and rhythm for the reader. I looked at the poetry website we had to use for a quiz. I was able to read various poems to get a feel of flow. After reading different poems, I felt more confident in the route I was going with my revision. The readings from assignments were very helpful in understanding how to write and the different styles that can be used. I enjoyed the assigned readings, poems, and short stories, because it gave you a whole different view of writing styles you may have not otherwise been exposed to. I was able to apply all of this to my revisions. Although the quizzes were challenging, they pulled out of me thoughts and ideas I didn’t know I had in me. It was challenging at first, but eventually I caught on and gave mo re effort. So I can say the quizzes helped me to push the envelope for my revisions. I developed my passion for the art of writing again after reading my